پاراگرافِ قاطع را دقیق‌تر کنید

all و everyone یک نظر را خیلی راحت قابل رد می‌کنند. دقیق نوشتن یعنی نظر نداشتن نیست؛ یعنی قطعیتِ جمله به اندازهٔ دانسته‌های شما باشد.

نسخهٔ سنجیده‌تر

Some students may find it hard to make time for reading when their phones offer constant entertainment. That does not mean every teenager dislikes books, and it does not show that phones alone caused any change in reading habits. A school could try giving students time to choose books that interest them and a quiet place to read without notifications. Teachers might then ask students whether they used that time and what made reading easier or harder. I would also like to hear from students who already read regularly. Before recommending a strict phone rule, the school should learn which problem it is trying to solve and whether a smaller change helps.

در متن، نگرانی، چیزهایی که هنوز نمی‌دانیم و پیشنهاد را پیدا کنید. هر سه می‌توانند در یک پاراگراف کنار هم باشند.